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  1. Think first
    Member

    Let this be the week,

    Ink from ur hearts will flow.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  2. blabla
    Member

    Astonished,
    amazed,
    bewildered,
    at what these girls are all about.
    shocked,
    at how shallow they are,
    confused,
    how they can be so immature.
    Girls,
    my age,
    my school,
    my class,
    yet they're so different.
    when will they serious out?
    do they even know what life is?!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  3. Think first
    Member

    Happy or sad
    Calm or mad
    Emotions we choose
    Keep cool or loose

    Its not what happens to us
    We decide how to react
    Having it easy may be a plus
    But in sticky situations we must use tact

    Let's try and write about something positive
    That we did today
    What do you say?

    Posted 3 years ago #
  4. blabla
    Member

    Imprisoned,
    behind iron bars,
    locked gates,
    barbed wire,
    tall fences,
    steal chains,
    guards surrounding,
    no way out,
    desperate for air,
    choking,
    NO WAY OUT!
    stuck,
    in this awful rut.

    In a sea,
    a powerful current,
    raging waves,
    furry of a storm,
    mist of the foamy water,
    overtaking me,
    down and under,
    up and down,
    floundering,
    drowning.

    in the wind,
    whisking away,
    the powerful gust,
    blowing me,
    sweeping me in its forceful path,
    and I succumb.

    gulping,
    gasping for a breath,
    but unable to.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  5. here i go
    Member

    ok so i've been itching to post my stuff here for months but i was so scared i'd be figured out by my friends who've seen my work... so to those of you who recognize me through my poems, you've always told me to share my work with others so here i go... gulp...

    DONT GIVE UP

    I look ahead, right at my goal
    Its great distance scares me so!
    And sitting here, so very far,
    Getting there, seems so bizarre!
    So as I stand up from my seat
    I want to make a quick retreat
    Maybe I'll run the other way
    And pretend that where I am's okay
    "But no you're not" I say aloud
    As if talking to a crowd
    When in fact i stand alone
    Making this conflict my very own
    And so i win this great combat
    And give my back a little pat
    I look again at my goal ahead
    And try to ignore the sense of dread
    So many obstacles in my track
    My confidence begins to slack
    With a wobble, the first step i take
    And then another with a shake
    Stride by stride i march along
    Each step making me feel strong
    But then i trip over a stumbling block
    And fall to the ground with one big plop
    Ouch, the pain, the aches, the hurt
    I moan and groan here in the dirt
    And from the ground, i strain my neck
    To give my goal another check...
    It seems as though it jumped a mile
    And reaching it might take a while...
    That thought leaves me quite broken-hearted
    I'd rather return to where i started
    My starting point is after all,
    So much closer to my fall
    How easy it would be to go back there
    And give my goal, not another care
    And as i turn, so very slow
    I begin to retreat, head hanging low
    But then while crawling my way back
    I suddenly stop right in my track
    "You stupid fool, what have you done?
    Why abandon the journey, you've just begun?
    It may be hard, it might get tough
    But trying once is not enough...
    You gotta try twice, three times, or four
    And if necessary, even more...
    Just don't give up, your goal's in sight,
    You just gotta keep up that fight!
    If you mess up, fall, slip, or trip,
    land on your face, do a backward flip,
    Just rise again, up from that dirt
    Clean your hands, brush off your shirt,
    Stand up straight, hold your head high
    And to that goal, you'll surely fly"
    so steady, carefully, slowly i stand
    And wipe the dirt off from my hands
    Facing my goal, i stand erect
    And continue on my way, step by step.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  6. observanteen
    trying to shteig in midos

    here i go: Welcome aboard! I'm SO glad you decided to post that poem! Well written, and with such feeling, it's clear you've been through this difficult ordeal yourself (not just giving advice without knowing what it's like!). Thanks a lot for the inspiration! Keep them coming (no, I DON'T know you:P)! Your amazingly srong character shines through. Keep going!
    Think First: Good idea:) Perhaps you should start?
    blabla: I'm truly sorry. Hang in there!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  7. MiddlePath
    Member

    here i go, wow, that was an amazing poem! And welcome! Please keep posting here! And nope, I don't know you either.

    blaba, your second to last poem on the previous page really spoke to me, because I felt the same way a few years ago, and I'm sure many people go through that confusion. What we can do is try to realize that everything that happens is for our good, and the reason we are confused is because sometimes we can openly see the good, and other times we can't. And even more so, sometimes it seems to be bad. But everything in the bigger picture is for our good, whether we see that good now, or in a year, or in 30 years.

    Believing this can really help as well with our feelings and mood. If we truly believe that everything is for our good, even when something "bad" happens, we can accept it with grace and even gratitude, because we know that G-d has something wonderful in mind for us, and that was why this "bad" thing had to happen. So it can really change our entire perspective on everything that happens in our daily lives.

    observanteen, thanks! (For your post on the previous page.) I do hope to stick around here, at least in this thread.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  8. PrincessEagle
    Flying High

    Blabla, keep going!!!!! Remember, YOU CAN DO IT!!!!!

    Here i go - welcome! Your piece is a WONDERFUL one, and can be a lot of chizuk. It's great to read, thank you for sharing it with us! You write really well, i really like the flow / rhyme of it. Just make sure that when you post indeed you won't regret it later :);):-)

    Observanteen, hi!!!! How are you??? I'm just curious on your words, "it's clear you've been through this difficult ordeal yourself (not just giving advice without knowing what it's like!)" - doesn't every person have goals they wish to strive to and difficulties overcoming it? ... What do you think? "Here i go"'s words are such chizuk and written so well! Thank you, again, here i go!

    Middlepath, that's GREAT words! You seem like a really special person.

    SaysMe, are you okay?? You've said in the past you don't write when you're too down... i hope you're just busy.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  9. observanteen
    trying to shteig in midos

    Middle: Glad you'll stay here:)
    Princess: Hi:) You sure are right. What I meant was, it seems like this particular poster STRUGGLED HARD. And I want to add, that there's no way I would know what's going in in anyone's life, and although some people may seem shallow and carefree on the outside, they may have some real difficulty that I don't know of. (I say this from experience!:P)Everyone has a goal. To some it's hard, and to other's it's... MURDER! It sure can get veeery tough at times (do I have to tell you about it?!). But again, there's NO WAY I could measure how difficult it is for others to achieve their goals. (Sort of like a test [why do I constantly use this example??] those who get a %100 didn't necessarily work harder than the kid who got an %85). But Hashem DOES know, and He will give us schar accordingly!Lefum tzara agra:)

    Posted 3 years ago #
  10. Think first
    Member

    here I go- amzing!!! I was contenplating giving up on something tonight, but after ur poem no way!! I'm going to brush off and take one step @ a time till I reach my goal.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  11. blabla
    Member

    Middlepath-these days I don't know how much I believe in that stuff...I try though. Its just so so hard sometimes!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  12. here i go
    Member

    thank you all for your wonderful feedback! i'm glad others are able to benefit from what i write... here's another i wrote a while back...

    About that mask you always wear,
    Why is it that you wear it?
    What secret's hiding under there
    And do you ever share it?
    What pains are hidden behind that smile?
    Why do you think that they don't show?
    Don't you realize that after a while
    Surely everyone will know?
    Cuz if you're always on a high
    It's obviously joy that's superficial
    No person exists that does not cry
    Your laughter must be artificial
    So take that mask off from your face
    And show me what's behind
    Show me every hidden pain
    Let's see what we can find
    Perhaps let a few tears drop
    So that everyone can see
    That there's a side that's covered up
    And they've all been deceived...

    I'm not asking that you tell the whole world what's inside
    Just to let out some emotions- no big deal!
    And once you've opened up, in the end you'll surely find
    A happiness that's never been more real

    Posted 3 years ago #
  13. blabla
    Member

    At the end of a hard day,
    my heart flows,
    its blood becomes ink,
    black ink,
    on this white and gray comforting screen,
    its familiar layout,
    its supportive posters.
    You mean the world to me.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  14. blabla
    Member

    My essence,
    engraved in my soul,
    imprinted in my heart.
    my personality,
    ingrained in my mind,
    nature to my body.
    yet its been covered,
    by layers upon layers,
    of moist, brown, slimy dirt,
    stones and pebbles,
    sharp rocks,
    filth.
    and now I must clean it.
    Therapy,
    removing it layer by layer.
    reexperiencing pain,
    entering confusion,
    getting dirty again,
    falling back,
    plunging forward,
    and every step with effort.
    changing thought patterns,
    changing habits,
    second nature,
    becoming last,
    first nature
    becoming a new person.
    revealing the engraved lettering upon my hidden soul.
    soul,
    what soul?
    I have a soul?
    what kind of soul?
    who's soul?
    how can that be-me?!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  15. blabla
    Member

    I huff,
    I puff,
    panting,
    struggling to breath,
    sharp cold breaths,
    yet I continue,
    I push on,
    because I've got a calorie quota,
    and I must achieve it.
    the pain in my legs,
    the sweat of my brow,
    but I continue.
    There's no stopping,
    otherwise I'll be FAT.
    AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I don't even know what I'm writing anymore! Feeling majorly fat! And utterly confused!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  16. MiddlePath
    Member

    PrincessEagle, thanks! And so do you!
    observanteen, I'm also glad!

    blaba, I understand it can be really hard to believe in that stuff when things are very difficult. That's when it's hardest to have faith, because it looks like G-d is hiding from us and doesn't care about us. I am no expert in boosting faith, but I'll try to say a few things.
    In order to have strong faith in G-d when things aren't going our way, we may need to openly see Him do good things for us. Sometimes it's hard to see those good things because we aren't focusing on them because of our negative feelings. A good way to see those good things is by trying every day to write down something good that happened to us. That will help us get more used to seeing the positive. Then, when we are seeing the good things G-d does for us, that strengthens our faith in Him because it shows us He really cares for us and looks after us.
    Once our faith gets stronger from those positive things, our faith will also be stronger when dealing with things we see as negative. And that will hopefully be able to change our perspective when "bad" things happen, and we will begin to see the good side of every negative situation.
    I really hope that helped somewhat!

    here i go, wow, your second poem was really great! I actually felt like the person you were talking to in the poem, a few years ago. I wouldn't let anyone see the pain I was dealing with, and always wore a smile so no one would think anything was wrong. I practically lived with a "mask". I still do, to a certain extent, but thankfully, now, I am much less in pain inside than I was a few years ago.

    PrincessEagle, that's really thoughtful of you to be thinking of SaysMe. SaysMe, I hope you're okay!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  17. blabla
    Member

    Middlepath-what you wrote inspired this but its not so good...

    I wear a mask,
    covering the "me" that's real,
    faking to be happy,
    to others to appeal.

    Its not who I am,
    its who I want to be,
    yet I'm not that person at all,
    I'm now constrained not free.

    Pretending life's awesome,
    smooth sailing and just so fine,
    but inside I'm so confused,
    myself I can't define.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  18. blabla
    Member

    There's a gaping hole inside me,
    it wishes to be filled,
    there's much missing from my past,
    it should've been instilled.

    I stuff it up with junk,
    to fill its massive vastness,
    I try to hurry the process,
    to escape the feeling with fastness.

    Some candy and some chocolate,
    some chips and some real food,
    a dose of everything will do it,
    set me in a good mood.

    But really that's just fake,
    filling the hole temporarily,
    just some short time relief,
    it helps only momentarily.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  19. kido
    Member

    Hi I'm new... i luv poetry...i cud share my stash if ne1 is intrsd

    The pen is my best friend
    I know how to start but I don't know how to end
    I could write day and night
    I release energy with all my might
    It's a one sided conversation no one could fight
    All thoughts and feelings are brought to light
    The words don't just tumble out of my mouth easily
    It's on paper and no one could argue with me
    The written word is clear and bold
    It could sometimes be ruthless and cold
    Black on white; no one can deny
    It's good proof when someone wants to lie
    Always there to look back
    For reference, to keep track
    "The pen is mightier than the sword"
    That is the written word
    But the pen is neuter, it takes no side
    To good or bad it's not tied
    Write only good; you're the boss
    Kind words are never at loss
    Use words that are soft and gentle
    Heartwarming and sentimental
    Let them penetrate, Let the rewarding cycle start
    Find the needy souls and the broken hearts
    It's an easy way
    To brighten one's day
    You have a gift, don't abuse
    So don't waste your words, make good use!!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  20. CallMeDave
    Member

    Chanukah, a festival of lights,
    Jelly doughnuts, latkes and eight exciting nights.
    Keep the dreidel spinning.
    Hopefully I will be winning.

    Parties, gatherings, celebration.
    Music, singing and jubilation.
    The menorah lights aglow.
    Children running to and fro.

    Latkes so fresh and hot.
    Right out of Bubby’s frying pot.
    "Chanukah gelt!!, Chanukah gelt!!" Zaidy calls.
    And suddenly everything stalls.

    Einiklach, children, everyone in line,
    Money from Zeidy one at a time.
    Presents and Chanukah treats galore.
    I can almost open up my own store.

    Joy and excitement fill the air.
    Gleaming faces everywhere.
    With all the spinning, frying, and exhilaration,
    I almost forgot Chanukahs interpretation.

    Well, a long time ago, you see,
    There was a man named Yehudah Hamaccabee.
    When times were good,
    The Holy Temple was running as it should.

    To the Holy Temple everyone would come.
    There was room for everyone.
    Sacrifices, prayer, and song.
    To visit the holy temple everyone did long.

    But suddenly an evil decree,
    King Antiochus, vicious as can be.
    Judaism is outlawed, Torah study is banned.
    Oppression and darkness befall the Jews of the land.

    With a heart full of hate,
    His army he sends to seal the Jews' fate.
    To Jerusalem they descend,
    The services in the Holy Temple they end.

    With the Holy Temple, violated and desecrated.
    Antiochus's men are extremely elated.
    Seemingly, the mission accomplished,
    The light of the Jews forever extinguished.

    Upon hearing this dreadful news,
    Sadness and anger filled the Jews.
    Matisyahu the High Priest shouts with might,
    Mi K'amocha B'aelim Hashem, who will join this righteous fight?

    Small in numbers but full of zest,
    The Jews gather, they will do their best.
    To reclaim the Holy Temple they will try,
    For this great cause they are ready to die.

    One by one Antiochus's men are defeated.
    An army once so large completely depleted.
    The Hand of Hashem is seen so clear.
    For not their own might got them there.

    Arriving at the Holy Temple's door,
    The Jews are shaken to the core.
    A ghastly sight lay before them,
    Destruction, degradation and total mayhem.

    Submerged in darkness.
    Their hearts filled with sadness.
    Completely torn apart,
    To restore order to the Holy Temple they start.

    The Menorah they would like to rekindle,
    But their hopes quickly dwindle.
    Pure oil with the High Priests seal,
    Is no where to be found in this whole ordeal.

    Searching in every corner and nook.
    Not a place they didn’t look.
    Hopelessness, despair all around.
    Suddenly, a miracle!! A flask of oil is found.

    Oil enough for just one night,
    But for eight days they managed to burn bright.
    The light of the Menorah illuminating the way.
    Casting away the darkness to this very day.

    In commemoration of the miracles and salvation.
    Chanukah is celebrated by the Jewish nation.
    Each night another candle, another spark,
    Slowly, steadily, casting away the dark.

    Just like the days of Chanukah long ago,
    One night's oil, for eight days did glow,
    Let the light of Chanukah shine and radiate.
    Throughout the year, the darkness to illuminate.

    So Happy Chanukah everyone.
    Go out and have loads of fun.
    But don't forget the message it tells you...
    May the Bais Hamikdash be rebuilt Bimheyrah Byameinu.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  21. oomis
    Best Bubby EVER

    My Chanukah is not about
    The gifts or gelt that we give out.
    It's not about the clothes or toys
    Received by all our girls and boys.

    It calls to mind a wondrous neis
    With which Hashem showed us His Grace.
    And on that day of great import,
    His miracles were of a spectacular sort.

    The Greek king tried to wipe us out,
    Erase our bitachon, create some doubt.
    But we stood by steadfastedly
    As he did things most dastardly.

    A woman lost her seven sons,
    They were among the bravest ones.
    Another fed dairy to a Greek
    Whose head on a pike she went to seek.

    So many died al Kiddush Hashem,
    But we persisted, in spite of "them."
    And when our sonim were defeated,
    The Maccabees'victory was not yet completed.

    Into our Beis Hamidash they walked with care
    Looking for holy remnants there.
    They found but one small cruse of oil
    That our enemies did not yet spoil.

    They lit the Menorah with trepidation
    And Hashem made a miracle for the Jewish Nation.
    For what was to last just one short day,
    For eight instead, lit up our way.

    And now we make our celebration
    As a very special commemoration
    Of all the nissim Hashem did then
    And continues to do again and again.

    My Chanukah is not about material things
    Like gifts of clothing, toys, or rings.
    It's about loving our Torah and sacrifice,
    And emunah for which we don't think twice.

    It's about the Jewish people, the Chosen Nation,
    About mesiras nefesh and dedication.
    And the hope that one day we will surely see,
    The Geulah Shelaima, and Binyan Bayit Shlishi.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  22. MiddlePath
    Member

    blaba, thanks for your poem! It was very good! It is exactly how I felt a few years ago.

    kido, welcome! And wow, that was great! It really shows the power that words can have! Please post more!

    CallMeDave and oomis, wow! Your poems about Chanukah are amazing! They both really gave me a better appreciation for the miracles that took place, and really helped me feel a greater attachment to the holiday! Thanks so much!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  23. SaysMe
    O pen, says me

    hi everyone, i'm back. PrincessEagle and MiddlePath, thanks so much for the concern. Its a good feeling to know ppl notice and care, and more than that, can verbalize it. I'm doing okay, up and downing. Fighting frustrations not depression right now. Thankfully! but frustrations are just that still- frustrating! and can still wipe me out and get me down. Wanted to post, but didn't feel like i had words, not to vent my feelings, and not to reply to others. so i took a break. on top of that, someone did find out who i was here, and i'm adjusting to the idea of not being anonymous... Back for now though!
    Welcome to all new people! this thread is getting popular! a lichtige Chanuka to all and thanks for all your poetry!
    PrincessEagle- what else to add? you're really someone special. And i'm so glad to have 'met' you.
    MiddlePath- your chizuk and outlook and bitachon is amazing and you so well pass it along. btw, i love reading your long essays and look forward to them. Such sensitivity, emunah, encouragement, care. and your individual responses always awe me.
    observanteen- a delayed welcome back!
    here i go- Your pieces are AMAZING! so good, and so much in them! Please please continue posting more!!
    blabla- i'm sorry your struggling and hurting. Reviewing pasts, taking yourself apart, the slow process, the pain, the challenges now... I wish there was a way to lessen your pain. Keep writing here! Stay strong!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  24. kido
    Member

    You are so blind
    Shallow as can be
    You see your daughter
    But that's not me.
    I have a problem
    I cannot articulate
    But does it justify
    My miserable fate?!
    I am what I am
    And not what you see
    Look beyond my outer self
    And find the real me.
    Wake up to reality
    Open your eyes
    See how I try
    To grow and rise.
    My feelings and emotions
    Are difficult to express
    But why destroy
    Shatter and suppress?!
    I am a person
    Just like you
    I have feelings
    And I'm sensitive too.
    I'm not my sister
    Not my friend
    I am I
    A different beginning, a different end.
    I am unique
    Don't compare
    I have a distinct personality
    A different flair.
    If you acknowledge
    That I am I
    You'll easily see the real me
    Eye to Eye!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  25. kido
    Member

    Blabla, ur poems are amazing, keep them coming!

    kido

    Posted 3 years ago #
  26. MiddlePath
    Member

    SaysMe, welcome back! We all really missed you here. Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm sorry to hear things have been frustrating for you. Hope things are better now! Looking forward to any new material you have.

    kido, another great poem! I'm sorry for what you are going through, it can be very hard when parents seem to not understand who their children really are inside, and the special care and attention each one needs. Wishing you the best.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  27. kido
    Member

    thanks for your encouraging words, middlepath. ill post more....
    Happy Chanukah

    Posted 3 years ago #
  28. kido
    Member

    The weather is so nasty
    It is such a bore
    Everything is done so hasty
    With mistakes galore.
    From when I open my eyes
    Thirteen minutes late
    I start of with the "why's"
    In this morning fate.
    Why am I always lazy
    And can't handle a time frame
    It's really crazy
    But I accept the blame.
    Why am I always tired
    Why am I such a sh'lemiel
    In job I would definitely be fire
    If I don't stop this Kinder Shpiel.
    Why did I trip on my negel vasser
    And then didn't find a bobby pin for my hair
    I say "the green is always grasser"
    Because I can't even think it clear.
    Why is there no water drink
    For me to keep cool?
    Where is the Cross word puzzle
    To keep me busy in school?
    And so the "why's"
    Go on and on
    But let me open my eyes
    And see what has been done.
    Out of bed we roll
    Fresh and healthy
    With a pure clean soul
    Aren't we wealthy?!
    Our hearts beat
    Our brains work well
    We have two healthy feet
    And noses that smell.
    Each and every sense
    Is a wonderful treasure
    Our gratitude to Hashem is immense
    For they give us so much pleasure.
    Let us open our eyes wide
    And see the wonders of Hashem
    To view the world on the rosy side
    And see the miracles in them!!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  29. Think first
    Member

    Awww.... Just wrote a poem and it got erased at the end. Ill do it later.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  30. MiddlePath
    Member

    Thanks, kido! A happy Chanukah to you as well.
    Your last poem is really great! It really shows us how much we have that we can thank G-d for. If we can focus on these things instead of the negative, we can live much happier lives. Thanks!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  31. Think first
    Member

    Sometimes happy
    And sometimes sad
    Peacefull and Calm
    Uptight and mad

    Why's it at times a breeze
    And sometimes a real sqeeze
    Some days I'm full of will
    On others I've got nill

    It may be the same sitch
    At times I'm fine
    And sometimes I twich

    Am I crazy am I insane
    Its life its not a game
    Can't I just always be in the same mood
    Whether I'm hungry or stuffed with food

    here's whay I'd like to share
    I'm gonna post it right here
    Abe Lincoln said something worthwhile to know
    "NOTHING IS EITHER GOOD OR BAD,THINKING MAKES IT SO"

    Posted 3 years ago #
  32. oomis
    Best Bubby EVER

    CallMeDave and oomis, wow! Your poems about Chanukah are amazing! They both really gave me a better appreciation for the miracles that took place, and really helped me feel a greater attachment to the holiday! Thanks so much! "

    What a nice compliment. Thank you, MP.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  33. puppy
    always try to make it look like the dog did it

    "Get out of here"
    i wanna yell,
    but instead I exclaim
    "Sure, come in!"

    "I dont wanna do this"
    i wanna whine,
    but instead I consent
    "I'll do it anytime"

    "I'm not going"
    i wanna shout,
    but instead I explain
    "I'll be ready in a moment"

    "I'm not wearing this"
    i wanna argue,
    but instead I compliment
    "I love how it looks"

    "I hate you!"
    i wanna scream,
    but instead I whisper
    "I love you too"

    Posted 3 years ago #
  34. puppy
    always try to make it look like the dog did it

    seas
    are big.
    so are
    hearts.
    words
    like garbage,
    waste it.
    words
    like sun,
    warm it.
    words
    like oil,
    slime it.
    words
    like fish,
    swim it.
    words
    like algae,
    bloom it.
    words
    like coral,
    brighten it.
    words
    like pollution,
    hurt it.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  35. puppy
    always try to make it look like the dog did it

    Pictures dancing,
    a mush of color,
    blurred lines.
    Black spot,
    getting bigger,
    and bigger,
    and bigger.
    Sarounds me.
    Inside.
    Its cold.
    It does not cry.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  36. CallMeDave
    Member

    Middlepath - Thanks for the compliment, much appreciated. A freilichin Chanukah

    Posted 3 years ago #
  37. MiddlePath
    Member

    Think first, great poem! And it's very true, many times it is the way we perceive something that makes something "good" or "bad" in our eyes.

    Thank you, oomis and CallMeDave, for your kind words! Happy Chanukah to you as well.

    puppy, wow, you really express yourself so amazingly in your poems! Glad to have you back here.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  38. PrincessEagle
    Flying High

    Observanteen, how are you doing?? thanks for taking it so well! Like you say – it’s like a test in school. Just a thought which these words remind me of, that I recently heard, for anybody reading this interested: Whatever life brings, a way to keep us going is by reminding ourselves, “It’s just a test!” !!!! No, I don’t mean a school test here either …;)

    Here I go, you write really well! The mask one is an interesting idea, almost a twist on a different viewpoint of not showing how you feel! But you explained it well with the last 4 verses.

    Blabla, those words of appreciation to posters are very nice of you to write. You other poems express so much pain, and yet, behind them, they show STRENGTH!!! You’ve got it in you, you can keep go forward, you’ll see the light yet again. Just – keep – going. Don’t give up. Try to listen to middlepath’s advise and keep holding on to all the things that YOU know make you tick.

    Middlepath, your words of encouragement and faith are, well, encouraging! I’m so glad that you’re posting more on this thread. You seem to say such sensible things in an understanding manner. You comment what to take from everything said and that’s really nice for a writer 

    Kido – Welcome!! Interesting way of looking at words … as in the no fight back. You end it very well, to make use of this wonderful gift! You describe the hurt of not being understood or fully accepted (perhaps accepted by yourself?) and yet you seem to be trying to find the best of the situation you are in, which is very important! You express your difficulty in speaking things in words, perhaps adding to the frustration of not being able understood, - it’s great you can do it on paper! Keep writing!

    CallmeDave, wow! It’s amazing! I love the flow and the lightness in it. Did you write it for something in particular?

    Oomis1105, same for you!! It’s amazing, and has a nice flow. Did you write it for something in particular?

    SaysMe!!! Welcome back here, I was concerned for you. Thank you for your kind words. You express yourself very well btw, perhaps you don’t feel it’s all the time but you just did it well here! I’m sorry for the frustrations… life is all about ups and downs – think of it like a graph – there can be ups and downs all the time but the main thing is that the TREND is going upwards. We just have to do our best...

    Think first, thank you for sharing Lincoln’s saying, it’s a good reminder!

    Puppy, they are great! I esp. like that first one on what you do regardless of how you feel.. Keep going!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  39. CallMeDave
    Member

    Princess eagle - Thanks for the compliment, much appreciated. I didn't understand the question though, can you clarify?

    Posted 3 years ago #
  40. oomis
    Best Bubby EVER

    Princess Eagle - thanks for the kind words, no I didn't write it for anything or anyone in particular. I saw the "Poetry" thread and got inspired to waxing..well... poetic.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  41. MiddlePath
    Member

    PrincessEagle, thanks so much! That was very nice of you to say. I find it really amazing how you take the time to respond in such a nice way to everyone here.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  42. PrincessEagle
    Flying High

    CallMeDave - i was just wondering what inspired your poem ;) If you just wrote it for this - like oomis1105 just did - or if you wrote it for somebody or something else!
    Thanks middlepath.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  43. CallMeDave
    Member

    Princess eagle - No, I did not write it specifically for anybody, I just figured I will write a poem about Chanukah and share it with everyone. I tried to write it more to the light side since life is serious enough as it is. Happy Chanukah once again.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  44. PrincessEagle
    Flying High

    CallMeDave, i love the lightness to it! As you say, life is serious enough as it is, and this poetry thread tends to show that side too;) You write so well, keep writing!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  45. MiddlePath
    Member

    I agree with PrincessEagle, it's always nice to have some "lighter" poems here to create a balance with the more serious ones. Keep it up, CallMeDave!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  46. observanteen
    trying to shteig in midos

    Middle: I sure am glad you are still on this thread!
    here i go: Great work!:)
    CallMeDave: Woah! Beautiful piece!
    Oomis: Thanks for sharing, truly nice!
    Princess: Ah, I didn't know I was supposed to take it hard. I'll try to do so, from now and on;) Howaya doin?
    SaysMe: How's it going? Your poems are truly a work of art. Hope things get better soon!
    blabla: How's everything? Poems are amazing - as usual!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  47. oomis
    Best Bubby EVER

    Dave, I add my kudos to those expressed by others.

    Posted 3 years ago #
  48. MiddlePath
    Member

    Thanks, observanteen! Good to see you back here as well!

    Posted 3 years ago #
  49. SaysMe
    O pen, says me

    sorry i write heavy stuff :).
    hey blabla, how are you? you also hiding out like me?

    Posted 3 years ago #
  50. MiddlePath
    Member

    SaysMe, no reason to be sorry! I really love your poems, heavy or light. And I miss them! I see you haven't posted a poem in a little while.. hope everything's okay!

    blaba, is everything okay? You haven't been here lately.

    kido, are you still around?

    Posted 3 years ago #

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