Luna Lovegood-
Very good!
Your style seems to be to think a lot about what you write.
MiddlePath-
It’s very good.
Hatzlocha raba putting it to music and publishing it.
Syag Lchochma-
This one from a couple of months ago was excellent at describing how we miss people who are no longer here, and how we try to hold on to our memories of them:
http://www.theyeshivaworld.com/coffeeroom/topic/att-poetry-people/page/19#post-358009