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  • #619219

    In my recent thread >here,<

    can you understand the rules as I have written them? If not, what is unclear? If you can understand them, is there any way in which

    you think I could have written it better?

    (It’s about 1 page long and should take you 3 minutes or less

    to read, so even if you’re not interested in playing games, I’d

    appreciate the writing critique.)

    #1222197
    Lightbrite
    Participant

    Good things:

    Seems easy to make

    Can use stuff that you already have

    Critique:

    I didn’t make it and maybe that is why it was hard to visualize

    I currently don’t have games at home to use those pieces. Maybe I could make them. If I did have a board game at home to take pieces from, I may not want to since I could risk losing them or getting them mixed up etc, which would make the other game less fun.

    What is the whole 22 thing on one side of a 5 x 5 board?

    Is there a picture or video out there? That may make it way easier and sound more fun.

    Otherwise it was very creative and maybe even fun to try out on a snow day 🙂

    #1222198
    Avram in MD
    Participant

    I (think I) understood the rules clearly enough. The only suggestion I have for your description of the game is to clearly separate between setup (equipment, layout), and play, and to describe them in that order.

    My thoughts (and you can check that my interpretation of the game is correct)…

    Setup

    Number of players: 2

    Equipment needed:

    1. 22 pieces for each player. The player must be able to distinguish his own pieces from his opponent’s. Also, the pieces must be stackable on top of each other. Checkers, playing cards, etc. are good for this.

    2. A 5×5 grid. The grid squares must be large enough to fit stacks of players’ pieces

    Play

    Goal: To accumulate stacks of 5 or more pieces. The first player to obtain 3 stacks wins.

    Rules of play:

    1. Players alternate turns (arm wrestle for first turn, or youngest goes first, whatever), and can take one action per turn.

    2. During his turn, player can take one of the three following actions:

    a. Put a piece down from his hand onto an empty square

    b. Move a single (unstacked) piece on the board to an adjacent empty square or on top of another piece/stack (I’m assuming this is legal based on your description)

    c. Remove any number of pieces from an existing stack and put them on an empty square or another piece/stack that is at a distance from the original square equal to the number of pieces removed from the stack. NOTE: Pieces can be moved horizontally, vertically, or diagonally across the board, but only across empty squares. They cannot “jump” over occupied squares. Entire stacks can be transferred and placed on other stacks in this manner.

    3. When, at the end of a turn, a stack has 5 or more pieces in it, it is removed from the board and awarded to the player whose piece is on the top of the stack.

    #1222199

    Thanks, Avram. You have let me know that I was not clear

    enough, because your re-write has several rules wrong,

    and you’ve given me a pretty good format to write in.

    #1222201

    I repeat my request. (If my new post isn’t up yet, it should be shortly.)

    #1222202

    Nu, Avram? I know you’re here (on the CR)…

    #1222203
    Avram in MD
    Participant

    Very clear! I might try the game out on an upcoming Shabbos.

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