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Something I wrote for class that i’m proud of…
The man stepped forward hesitantly, slowly removing his products and placing them on the counter.
The old man turned to wave to the cashier, his sleeve riding up as he did revealing the medical bracelet on his wrist.
This is something so beautifully written, and pulls on the emotions. I hope you got a great grade!
Okay, so at least it leaves us to grade it ;-). You know of a good online writing course? Very impressive writing! (regardless of what the topic was “meant” to be on!)
soliek -It really is written well, I enjoyed.
Can I ask you a question about the content, really just interested in your opinion –
So what do you propose ? Dan l’chaf zchus is very nice, def. try to do so, but to maneuver through life you need to make assumptions. Must I allow all old people to be unreasonable because they might have alzheimers? (I guess in this story she could have been more patient, but that would be so irregardless of the outcome.)
It reminds me of all the articles you see these days about being tactful. Must we avoid all conversation because maybe one of the listeners has some negative experience with the topic ?
Nice job (although the expression “ticked off” would have been more appropriate for Yeshiva World).
Kind of a modern version of the famous story about R’ Chayim Brisker being abused by an innkeeper until a rebbe came in and recognized him, and R’ Chayim would not accept an apology until the innkeeper accepted to treat every Yid with the proper respect.
Marvelous writing!!
So well written, I felt like I was watching the scene right ther as if I was on line!! Really!
Hmn, I already see from other comments that people are seeing the point of the story differently…
DY- It happened with the bais halevi. As heard in brisk chumash shiur.
soliek, what a thought-provoking, well-written, charming little piece.
As Logician pointed out, this piece begs a response to how one should deal with others on a regular basis, and your response definitely shed light on that. If I may add on a little, and say that it goes hand in hand with being perceptive, and thinking about others. The man in the track suit seemed to seriously lack in that area. He considered himself more important than anyone else. Couple that with his obvious impatience, and that’s what you end up with.
It is difficult to deal with people who consider themselves more important than anyone else, because they will never listen to “mussar”, since they consider themselves perfect. It all comes down to haughtiness. If we were more perceptive, more aware of the situations of others, we wouldn’t have to jump to conclusions, we would be more patient, more understanding, and in general, much better people to be around.
Logician: Hmn, I already see from other comments that people are seeing the point of the story differently…
A sign of good writing.
Toi: Thanks.
soliek, yea, I suppose so. Actually, I didn’t answer any questions, I sort of just went on a rant on something related to your post. But again, great stuff, and keep ’em coming!
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