September 11, 2011 7:05 pm at 7:05 pm #1167260
A gigantic boom,
the scene of smoke,
the horrifying view,
our hearts broke.
The cries for help,
the world has collapsed,
fire travels in streams.
plunging to their death,
with no other choice,
they held their breath.
the building collapsed,
in shambles in lied,
trapped people all over,
we hope they survived.
Maybe if I have patience I’ll write another better one later. This one is just whatever…September 12, 2011 5:14 pm at 5:14 pm #1167261
AYC, I know I’m a bit late, but I only had a chance to write at night.
The towers we lost
The lives it cost.
The towers smoking
More news yet
Hit with power
The other tower!
The fire raging
Once powerful and strong
Crumbling to the ground
And the lives it took along.
The malicious scheme
The Muslims set
We will remember…
We shall never forget.September 12, 2011 5:51 pm at 5:51 pm #1167262
Blabla – whoa. How powerful. You know how well you write!
Observanteen – you write so well, it’s truly strong and expressed in such a nice way. Haven’t seen you around in a bit, missed you! BTW there’s ways of getting in contact if you’ve been following ..!September 12, 2011 6:37 pm at 6:37 pm #1167263mytakeMember
Nice poem! Do you write peotry regularly?September 12, 2011 6:45 pm at 6:45 pm #1167264
Thanks so much, blabla and observanteen
You were SO good in depicting that awful scene.
We just need bitachon in Avinu Malkenu
And we need Moshiach bimhayra viyamainu.September 12, 2011 9:32 pm at 9:32 pm #1167265
Thanks, folks. Nice to hear feedback:)
Princess: Thanks for saying that:) I’m working now, so I’m pretty busy. Why, I’d love to get in touch! How do I do that?
mytake: I write when I’m overflowing with emotion. After watching the horrifying videos of 9/11 I just HAD to write.
AYC: Thanks for your kind words. And you’re right about bitachon.September 12, 2011 9:56 pm at 9:56 pm #1167266
observanteen, hope it’s busy in a good way! Yeah, i know exactly what you mean (well, in my own way of course) when you say about HAVING to write – so did you write this because ayc asked for it or just because you felt the need to?! i use gmail btw. And because i couldn’t use just my user name i put “fh” for “flying high” before.
i love to write and i do write a lot but i don’t like to post it so publicly on here.. AYC do you write often too?September 12, 2011 10:05 pm at 10:05 pm #1167267
PrincessEagle: Yep, it’s busy in a good way b”H. I wrote it because ayc asked for it, and because I had the need to:)
Would you share your poetry privately? I’d love to see them. BTW, I’m home now, and our computer has a filter so I can’t go on gmail. Maybe I’ll visit tomorrow at my lunch break.September 12, 2011 10:11 pm at 10:11 pm #1167268
You’re computer has a filter so you can’t email to gmail.com? I think i’d share some of them privately, the ones that aren’t so “private”!September 16, 2011 5:25 pm at 5:25 pm #1167269
bpt walked in the blistering heat
Begging to get some blistering feet
Admittedly just to get a shtickle keegel
His commitment portrays a Yid so regalSeptember 16, 2011 5:27 pm at 5:27 pm #1167270
You know fashion designers like Vera Wang and Bill Blass
Who are considered Kings and Queens of elite fashion class
Whose goal is that their designs cause people to turn and stare
Who dictate to the rest of the world the current fashion flair
One year it’s slits, one year it’s tight
One year it’s short, to men’s delight
Exposing collarbones, elbows and knees
To the delight of any man who sees
They’ve apparently run short of fabric
On either side of the Atlantic
How can women be so blind
So as not to know the human male’s mind
Men are very visual creatures
So please cover your G-d given features
G-d is the BIGGEST fashion Designer
Who wants you to look refined and finer
He wants you to be attractive but not to attract
For you to be elegant but not to distract
You’re Hashem’s precious daughter whom He has blessed
So please Thank Him by the way you are dressedSeptember 16, 2011 5:35 pm at 5:35 pm #1167271
AYC – hey, it’s really powerful! Can’t say it’s easy to do in action but it’s really good!! Just wondering, what made you think of this now / post it now!
Have a good shabbos!September 16, 2011 5:52 pm at 5:52 pm #1167272
Thanks for your kind words.
“Just wondering, what made you think of this now”
These were replies in two other threads and just included them here. If you read the original threads, you’ll see why I wanted to write these poems.
“can’t say it’s easy to do in action”
You get credit for each and every struggle, for every time you fight with yourself,for every bead of sweat, and not just for the final result.
L’fum tzaara agraSeptember 16, 2011 9:44 pm at 9:44 pm #1167273
The stab passed through my heart,
the blood gushes out,
oozing through my tiny heart,
in excruciating pain I shout.
Abandoned and alone,
I’m a torn, lost soul,
the slice that ripped my life apart,
in my heart has formed a hole.
I’m hurt, I cry,
In pain my shrieks pierce the air,
Helpless, nobody seems to mind,
this world is cruelly unfair.
I know its short…maybe more later.September 18, 2011 5:42 am at 5:42 am #1167274
hi. its my first time checking out the coffee room and these poems are amazing!!!!!!!!!!!! i cud identify with so many of them especially blabla. amazing!
blabla: ur talent is outstanding. u should write proffesionaly. seriously.September 18, 2011 6:45 am at 6:45 am #1167275
NO! I’m not in any honors english classes and I can’t get into any cuz I don’t know english! I’m a stupid dummy! Okay you got the point…I’m super depressed right now 🙁 But seriously, I’m not good enough to write professionally and I can only write in certain moods when emotions overtake me.
observanteen-when you had anxiety, did you get naucious? like stomach aches? Nothing is helping 🙁 but I didn’t have a chance to try the cds so bli neder I will.September 18, 2011 11:19 pm at 11:19 pm #1167276
Of course I had stomach aches (which was my excuse not to eat). They were so often and so bad, I checked it out by the doctor. I actually did have a tiny cut in one of my intestines (I think) and took medication for it. Interestingly enough, when my anxiety was gone, so were the stomach aches. Stomach aches are a real sign of anxiety.
Now, I’m not trying to be preachy or anything, but your sitting and waiting for some miracle to happen is not productive. Why don’t you order the CDs? Or go to your therapist? Or talk to a friend? Why don’t you do something to stop all this?September 19, 2011 12:40 am at 12:40 am #1167277
Woah calm down! I just increased my meds a little and now I’m getting a hold of the cds from someone who already used them. (I also emailed them and got a free sample) I’m in very intense therapy (twice a week!) and I’ve been working on it. Also since I started school its been tough but working through it.
Mods, since I know you’re reading this, can you please tell me how I can get permission to post an email address (that I specifically made for the purpose of the cr)? ThanksSeptember 19, 2011 12:47 am at 12:47 am #1167278gematriaMember
he is sitting on the side, face looks glum,
is as if hes saying, dont approach me, near me dont you come,
you think to yourself how stuck up,what an uptight guy,
but in reality he is only shy,
so please just smile at him or say hi,
you dont need a reason why,
you have no idea how good he will feel,
his mean look, may be a call for help, an appeal,
its one easy thing to do,
and you may change this persons life too,
just as you dont judge a book by its cover,
dont judge a person by the wall he puts up to feel safe, to hover…September 19, 2011 12:49 am at 12:49 am #1167279
Sorry, I didn’t mean to offend you. I’m glad you’re working on it. Have you asked your therapist what you can do to get rid of the nausea?September 19, 2011 3:21 am at 3:21 am #1167280
No problem-yeah I asked her and my psych. and both said just tell yourself its anxiety and that’s why but its horrible! It comes so often and becomes physical pain! When I was little I also had it and went for medical tests cuz they thought it was real but was just anxiety! Its really crazy especially when I’m not home.September 19, 2011 4:22 am at 4:22 am #1167281
Do you excercise? Excercising helps me a lot. Even now, when I’m a bit anxious about something, I do some excercise (I jump on the trampoline – usually for 1/2 hr, somtimes 1 hr). It should also help you with your stomach aches.September 19, 2011 4:38 am at 4:38 am #1167282
I love exercise! I try to do it as often as I can and I wish I owned a trampoline 🙂 Well, I’m off to exercise anyways right now so definitely great to know that it helps for stomach aches! The weird part is that I’m usually anxious that I’ll get a stomach ache so its a vicious cycle.September 19, 2011 5:28 am at 5:28 am #1167283MiddlePathParticipant
I recently remembered a song I wrote in high school, with the lyrics about a soldier dying in battle, and his final thoughts.
Here I lay on blood soaked ground
Surrounded by the dead, waiting to be found
Chaos of war flows through my veins
For the blood once there, now the ground it stains
I look to my side, and see nothing but gray
Smoke of gunfire darkened up my day
As my soul departs and life shuts its iron door
I know I’m like any victim of war
I sigh to the thought that my existence will now cease
And my memories will scatter like dust in the breeze
I’ve got no hope left, there’s no way I can survive
Only my headstrong mentality keeps me alive
I look to my side, and see nothing but gray
Smoke of gunfire darkened up my day
As my soul departs and life shuts its iron door
I know I’m like any victim of warSeptember 19, 2011 5:32 am at 5:32 am #1167284CallMeDaveParticipant
Not sure if its my place. Just a suggestion. Sometimes if you take small areas where you think you can do better and increase mitzvos etc…. it brings more light into the soul and it might help in these situations. A little light pushes out a lot of darkness. HatzlachaSeptember 19, 2011 8:22 pm at 8:22 pm #1167285
Middle: Your poem moved me. I’d love to hear the song…September 19, 2011 9:14 pm at 9:14 pm #1167286
AYC – Thanks for explaining! “Aha” as they say..
Blabla, i’m so sorry for your struggle! How is it going? How was the exercise?
Puppy, i’m sorry that you can identify with esp. blabla.. it’s def. not easy and i wish it easier for both of you and everybody else.
gematria – nice poem! Def. an important point..
Middlepath, this is really something… do you have the song? I would love to hear it (too!)
Observanteen, do you have your filter on still?September 19, 2011 10:10 pm at 10:10 pm #1167287Doodle-Man™Member
come on and get rhyming
nows the perfect timing
you can be in poetry hall of fame
need some practice?
join the rhyme game!September 19, 2011 11:49 pm at 11:49 pm #1167288MiddlePathParticipant
Thanks, observanteen and PrincessEagle. I don’t currently have the recorded song, but I can record it again when I have time. I still know how to play it.September 20, 2011 4:01 am at 4:01 am #1167289
this place so supportive!
blabla and observanteen: i dont really have anxiety but i do get headaches all the time. tylonel doesnt really help and i asked my phsyciatrist and he said theres nothing you could really do about it.
btw does anyone know any frum support groups for teens with eating disorders? would really appreciate it.September 20, 2011 4:47 am at 4:47 am #1167290
Princess, no. I didn’t get the chance to create a gmail acct. Probably will do tomorrow. Talk to you then…:)September 21, 2011 5:42 am at 5:42 am #1167291
I dont believe,
what they say.
Its a lie.
But im still following.
I dont believe,
what they teach.
Its a fable.
But im still learning.
I dont believe,
what they practice.
Its a fib.
But im still doing.
I dont believe,
what they believe.
But Im still praying.September 21, 2011 5:04 pm at 5:04 pm #1167292
puppy: Why don’t you do some research?September 21, 2011 7:34 pm at 7:34 pm #1167293
i’m sorry puppy that you’re going through this. i really know the type of feelings and i just wish for you that you’ll see clarity. Search, question, find answers – you can’t say for sure it’s a lie until you know that for sure and you can only know that if you’ve done the searching and seen that. Sending you sympathy and hope!!September 22, 2011 3:48 am at 3:48 am #1167294
You explain so clearly why he looks glum
And is so miserable when people don’t come
That he seems so desperately alone
And doesn’t get many calls on the phone
That people think he’s really uptight
And very stuck up, but that’s really not right
In essence he is just EXTREMELY shy
And just needs a smile with a very warm “Hi!”
This may get him to turn things around
And get others familiar with his voice’s sound
Won’t you please take the time to socialize with him
And because of YOU, his days won’t be so grim
Please encourage him to make the first move
It won’t be easy till he finds his groove
You will make his days SOOOOO much brighter
Till he’ll talk non-stop, you’ll want him to be quieter!September 22, 2011 3:55 am at 3:55 am #1167295
Thank you for your poem, MiddlePath
It reminded me of 9/11 and the killers’ wrath
The scene you depict was a common one that day
A scene which many would wish would go awaySeptember 22, 2011 4:12 am at 4:12 am #1167296
What an amazing person you are
I see in you a shining star
Despite the fact that you don’t believe
You still practice and do not leave
You are searching for answers in your life
Despite your pain which must be sharp as a knife
You are SOOOO not giving up
You were so blessed with a Yiddishe kup
Just give yourself the time you need
It may take time, but don’t you speed!
You’ll be stronger at the end of it all
That’s what usually happens when we take a fall
Just keep writing in the meantime,
By the way, I loved your rhyme!
Can’t wait till I see you next
Don’t care if it’s in rhyme or in plain text!
For there’s a lot of support in this thread
So put down your book and write us instead!September 22, 2011 4:28 am at 4:28 am #1167297
tnx. well i used to have lots of questions but now i just am fed up.September 22, 2011 4:31 am at 4:31 am #1167298
Did you ever do research? Did you get answers to your questions? I know exactly how you feel, been there done that.September 22, 2011 4:33 am at 4:33 am #1167299
You may be fed up
but please don’t give up
Could you share a question?September 22, 2011 5:00 am at 5:00 am #1167300
If you ever feel like sharing a concern
We’ll all try to answer by taking a turn
Since MANY have asked before you as well
The answers should help, as far as I can tellSeptember 23, 2011 7:06 am at 7:06 am #1167301
tears stream down my face,
not a merciful soul in sight,
nobody who cares,
nobody listens to my plight.
I’m suffering alone,
in this dark world of torment,
I’m unhappy with my life right now,
i’m always discontent.
I’m longing for a peaceful death,
painfree, easy, fast,
to destroy the anguish in me,
to fix my horrid past.
Hashem, AD MOSAI?!?!?!! HELP! 🙁 Rosh Hashana time is the hardest for me…September 23, 2011 4:10 pm at 4:10 pm #1167302
blabla: why’s rosh hashana a hard time for you? Think of it as an oppurtunity to ask for a new happy year. Good luck!
PrincessEagle: I don’t work on Friday’s, so Good Shabbos!September 23, 2011 4:56 pm at 4:56 pm #1167303
Puppy, how is going? i’m really sorry that you are feeling this way. These aren’t pleasant feelings. What are your options now? Do you have somebody to talk to about this? Is it a matter of time?
Your poem spoke a lot, just the certaincy that you wrote with bothered me, and it really hurt me to read the “i’m praying but it’s false”. You can’t really be praying than in the sense of talking your feelings – i’m not judging and i do understand in my own way! Can you try to just keep that up at least?
And what is it that you’re looking for here? Is it answers or is it just sympathy and care or something else. We can try to give whatever it is!
AYC – you write so well and you really show such a nice personality… (always good to hear nice things huh?!)
Blabla! i’m so sorry for your pain! It hurt me to read this!! Please, just hold on, the light will still come, you’re way to young to give up already! Yes, until when… g-d, until when?!?!?!!
Hey observanteen, why, thanks!! You know how it’s the little things that make a person feel brighter? You just did that 😉 Good shabbos!!September 23, 2011 6:00 pm at 6:00 pm #1167304
Not sure how I did that, but I’m glad to hear! Have a wonderful shabbos!September 23, 2011 7:39 pm at 7:39 pm #1167305
When you feel despondent in the wee hour of the night
And you keep thinking of your very sad plight
Could you try to read the poems on this very thread
And try to replace the negative thoughts dancing in your head
You’ll see that your sadness come during the darkness
It would help if you have this awareness
Reread those poems which give you support
You are not alone as much as you purport
You are such an important part of our nation
Whose going through a tough time in the duration
The light at the end of the tunnel surely will come
Then you’ll be singing all day and at night you will hum
You just plug forward till that day will arrive
Your personality and soul will just start to thrive
Let’s be patient till that day will unfold
And then you’ll see you’ve got a heart of pure gold
Use this opportune time to beg for a great New Year
That your only concern should be about what to wear!
Cry to Hashem for the help that you need
May you be fortunate to have a wonderful year decreed!September 25, 2011 1:34 am at 1:34 am #1167307
All depression hates
the jubilant face,
the smile stretching wide,
the peace felt inside.
All depression resents
breaking of the dark fence,
letting light seep thru,
personality be true.
All depression reviles
putting sadness in file,
doing what is meant,
endless chattering be sent.September 25, 2011 1:53 am at 1:53 am #1167308
Depression is a dark place
Let it do an about face!
It’s a place of gloom and doom
Where happiness has no room
Try to build your emunah
It’s a great way to build simcha
Knowing Hashem’s on your side
And hurts when you’ve cried
Read The Garden of Emunah
Do it now or even soona’!
It’s the gift that keeps on giving
And you’ll feel the joy in living!September 25, 2011 4:40 am at 4:40 am #1167309
On the surface I appear,
so frum, so sweet,
charming and happy,
well rounded complete.
but inside I’m crumbled,
destroyed and overthrown,
no dignity, no strength,
no opinion of my own.
the tears keep on rolling,
my eyes just don’t dry,
in pain, I weep,
I can’t stop to cry.
I am not frum,
not jewish not good,
haven’t kept shabbos,
hiding under my hood.
No really, I’m struggling with my emunah now especially with elul and rosh hashana…its very hard for me. Here’s what I wrote to my therapist:
The day I arrived,
I entered Your room,
I was sure it was pointless,
A life of just gloom.
I was a failure,
So helpless and dumb,
Pointless in this world,
Suffering until numb.
I traveled the path,
Of agony and pain
I shed buckets of tears,
My cries were in vain.
I was alone in this world,
So dark and so cold,
Everyone was wicked,
Things rustic and old.
But now someone joined me,
On this hard, bumpy journey,
Gave me comfort and strength,
My defense, my attorney.
Supported, built up,
Finally im on an incline.
Thank You so much,
I cannot say it enough,
you are just priceless,September 25, 2011 6:06 am at 6:06 am #1167310
blabla: that poem to your therapist is beautiful. Your other poem is…sad. Oh, so sad! You can’t imagine how much it hurt me to read it. What should I say? What CAN I say to make you feel better, stronger, empowered? I want you to know, that although I’ve no clue who you are, I feel your pain and think of you quite often. What hurt me most was to read that you don’t keep shabbos.
Why is that? Do you have questions? Please ask them! There are answers to EVERYTHING. I know, because I had them too, and they were answered. Hatzlacha rabba.
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